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Post by deadwizard on Feb 24, 2024 1:14:06 GMT -5
Hi all, I'm looking for full feedback and criticism of my first full song. It isn't my first song overall, just the only one I've been happy with and saw through past WIP. I've been spending the last few weeks trying to learn how to make Dungeon Synth and Dark Ambient in general. Thanks all. www.youtube.com/watch?v=MWWHB_tJEhQ
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Post by deadwizard on Feb 24, 2024 1:14:59 GMT -5
Worth noting, the tracklist is just a placeholder, this will likely be song 1 and could definitely be renamed if needs be.
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Post by starlitpath on Feb 24, 2024 13:09:09 GMT -5
I like it. I think it could gain alot if you change the melody in the second part (the one played octave higher - it was a good way to increase the variation - but IMO it's too little). And - although I guess it wasn't a deliberate choice - I love the song's abrupt end!
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Post by deadwizard on Feb 24, 2024 16:25:28 GMT -5
I like it. I think it could gain alot if you change the melody in the second part (the one played octave higher - it was a good way to increase the variation - but IMO it's too little). And - although I guess it wasn't a deliberate choice - I love the song's abrupt end! Thank you ![:)](//storage.proboards.com/forum/images/smiley/smiley.png) . I'll play around with the second part today and see what works. The abrupt end was a deliberate choice, but not one that I wanted, if you know what I mean, lol. I tried to fade out everything but the drums in revision 1 but it sounded too odd, so I decided to let it end suddenly until I could think of something.
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Post by deadwizard on Feb 24, 2024 17:12:38 GMT -5
I like it. I think it could gain alot if you change the melody in the second part (the one played octave higher - it was a good way to increase the variation - but IMO it's too little). And - although I guess it wasn't a deliberate choice - I love the song's abrupt end! youtu.be/gfRXm6cBEJg Here's a new revision with your advice applied, I quite like it, what do you think?
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Post by AndruJorj on Feb 25, 2024 12:00:02 GMT -5
Monotonous, repetitive, dissonant. All of these traits can be good, or bad, depending on the context in which they are used.
Your sound textures compliment each other well. There's a lot of space in the mix for more; more instruments, more layers of sounds, more complexity in songwriting. Or not. Context...
I didn't dislike it. Continue to create, and you will hone your songcrafting skills with time.
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Post by deadwizard on Feb 25, 2024 21:32:27 GMT -5
Monotonous, repetitive, dissonant. All of these traits can be good, or bad, depending on the context in which they are used. Your sound textures compliment each other well. There's a lot of space in the mix for more; more instruments, more layers of sounds, more complexity in songwriting. Or not. Context... I didn't dislike it. Continue to create, and you will hone your songcrafting skills with time. Thank you for the reply The repetitivity is the thing that is annoying me, and as starlightpath said earlier, it could use some variety in the second half. I've been working on changing up the second part over Sunday, so hopefully by the time I finish it, it'll be more varied. Other than that, the monotony and dissonance are something I'm looking for on this track at least, as I want to create a sense of getting lower into a cave. I've also been looking at other instruments to add to the second part to introduce more variety without outright changing the melody itself. Again, thank you for the reply, and I love your music man
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